Friday, September 25, 2009

Sentence 1

Her sentence:
Hastily, she tosses out old clothes, a sketch pad, charcoal pencils, anything she can't sell.
from The Bar Code Rebellion by Suzanne Weyn
The use of asyndeton further expresses her haste in throwing items out of the bag in the urgency to find an item that will be useful to her. She has no time to waste, and the sentence reflects that by not wasting the time to put a conjunction.
My sentence:
Quickly, he grabs onto his children, his wife, his dog, whatever he can save.

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