Sunday, October 4, 2009

Sentence 8

Their sentence:
Something smelled amazing--hot and sweet and delicious.
from Marked by P.C. & Kristin Cast

The sentence further explains the extraordinary smell while the use of the polysyndeton set off by dashes emphasizes each individual description of the smell making them each equally important to the next.

My sentence:
Everything felt unwelcoming--chilly and quiet and unfriendly.

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